영어 숙제로 영작한 건데 좀 봐주세요ㅠㅠㅠㅠㅠㅠㅠㅠ

When the depression and lethargy comes to you,  

all you have to do is just close your eyes 

and keep thinking about your crowning people. 

 

This is your mom's breath, 

and this is your dad's heartbeat. 

These are your family's bliss. 

Remember it all the times. 

This is the reason that you must alive. 

 

 

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문법적으로 이상한 부분 있으면 좀 고쳐줄 수 있나요???ㅠㅠㅠㅠㅠ