에세이 쓴거 봐줄수있는사람ㅠㅜㅠㅠㅠ영어 못하니까 부담갖지말고 이상한거 말해주랑

ㅍ펑! 

 

 

 

 

읽어줘서고마워ㅠㅠ문법틀린곳 많을꺼야..★

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늦게라도 말해주라ㅜㅜㅜㅜ제바류ㅠㅠ

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Among the rest, my youngersister, who are similar age, is the most. Although we have much time to tease and fight together, She also give me amusements and consolations. 이부분을

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Among them, my younger sister, who is similar age with me, is most the precious people for me. Although we tease and fight a lot, she gives me amusements and consolations too. 이거로

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adventage를 advantages로

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When i stay with her를 When i am with her로

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cheating about을 chat about 이나 talk about으로

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5에게
3번째이유말할떼만 과거형썼는데 그거 현재형으로 바꾸는게 좋을거같아

[글쓴이]

우와사랑해♡♡♡

[글쓴이]

진짜고마워ㅜㅜㅜㅜㅜ

[글쓴이]

혹시 결론부분은 고칠거없을까??

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For the above-mentioned reasons, I talked why I love and cherish my younger sister. 이거를 These are the reasons why I love and cherish my younger sister 이거로 고치고 I'm going to more take care of her. 를 I'm going to take care of her more 이거로 I think I'm very pleasure tk have these sister.

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맨 마지막 문장은 I am very pleased to have my sister로

[글쓴이]

고마워ㅜㅜㅜㅜ 에세이 형식은 맞는거야? 그리고 길이는어때..?