영어잘하는 사람 내가 작문한거 확인 좀 해주라!!

I want to be a teller

Because when I visited bank I appreciated the bank teller's kindness. While I study hard I interrested in Economic. Also income is all right. I am interested in!

I want to work about providing information to people. I hope to meet people and when I provide information to people. I want to feel a sense of acoomplishment

 틀린거 있으면 말해주라...뭐 추가 하고 싶은데 뭘 넣어야 될지 모르겠다..

 

[익인1]

while은 진행형 쓰고 bank 앞에 관사붙여

[글쓴이]

무슨 말이야..?

[익인2]

자나가던 익인인데 while i studying hard~~~~~~~~
이렇게 더ㅣ는 거라는 말?..bank 앞에 a나 the 붙이라는 건가