영어 적어봤는데 혹시 문법 틀린거 있나 확인해줄 익인 ㅠㅜ

 

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I have a brunch

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아항 또 뭐 고칠건 없어?ㅠㅜ

[익인2]

저거 스피킹 발표 원고야 혹시? 그럼 두번째줄 and then하고 콤마 찍는게좋을거같아

[글쓴이]

음,,스피킹이긴한대 그냥 내가 저걸외워서 말해야하거든 ㅜㅜ

[익인3]

1. I wake up around 10:00a.m. 이 더 자연스러울 거 같고
10:00 a.m., have a brunch (in that time 꼭 들어가야 돼?), and then wash my face and hair.
While ~, I am usually on my smartphone.
At 1:00 pm
my brother recommends 혹은 recommended
When I (get to) hang out with my bf, we often go to 서면 to eat some delicious food, go to a karaoke, and so on
After the sunset, we each go back home and say goodbye.
When I get back home, I eat dinner with my family.
After that I come to my room, and it's either I do my homework or be on the phone again.

음 최대한 안 바꾸면서 자연스럽게 해봤는데... 스피킹이래서

[글쓴이]

오오아냐 영 이상하면 거의 바꿔두 돼 학 고마워ㅠㅜ

[익인4]

2번째 거
2. He is born in 하동. he has been raised at 하동 and came (만약 부산익 아니면 went) to Busan when he was 21 years old. He is a very kind and warm person. On weekends, he usually cooks for our family. And the food tastes very good! I think my dad is tall and handsome (compared to his friends) but I am not tall at all haha. His favorite food is ramen. So he usually eats ramen at night.

[익인5]

해외익이야. 질문 있으면 말해줭

[글쓴이]

내가 부산살면ㄴ came 으로 써야하는거야??

[익인6]

went라고 해도 되긴 하는데 came이 더 자연스러워 ㅋㅋㅋ 부산에 이사오셨습니다 라고 하지 부산에 가셨습니다 라고 하면 이상하니까 ㅋㅋㅋㅋㅋ

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아항ㅋㅋㅋㅋㅋㅋ

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혹시 ㅠ 이번에도 또 시험치는데 문법 같은거 봐줄 수 있어??ㅠㅜㅜㅜ

[익인7]

아 알림을 못 봤네 무슨 일이야?

[글쓴이]

이번에는 기말시험인데 또 스피킹 친대서 ㅜㅜㅜㅜ 아근데 이거 너무 길까? 1분안에 말해야하는데

[익인8]

글쓴이에게
FOR last summer vacation, I went TO Tokyo for 3 weeks. THE REASON WHY I could stay so long is THAT my friend lives alone in Tokyo. I went to so many places like 신주쿠, 오다이바, 롯본기, 시부야, and so on. I think the most interesting place WAS 시부야 because there WERE lots of people (so famous restaurantS HAD waiting lineS) and THERE WERE tall buildings. Additionally, THE crosswalk in front of THE Shibuya station IS ALWAYS BUSY WITH many people CROSSING, so that's why IT'S called SCRAMBLE CROSSING. When I WAS CROSSING this crosswalk, I WAS so astonishED because THERE WERE A LOT MORE PEOPLE THAN I THOUGHT WHO WERE CROSSING. I've never seen anything like that. During THE 3-WEEK STAY, I ate 스시, 라멘, 규카츠, AND MANY other Japanese foods. Additionally, this WAS my first time that I stayED FOR 3 weeks in A foreign country. I wish I could go again IN FUTURE.

대문자로 된 부분이 고친 부분들이야! 타이머 켜고 말해보고 있는 중

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글쓴이에게
조금 빠르게 말했을 때 아슬아슬하게 1분 채우네. 조금 버벅거리거나 문장 사이사이 띄우면 1분 30초+ ㅠㅠ 뺄 수 있는 부분이나 축약시킬 수 있는 부분 있어?

[글쓴이]

9에게
음...그치ㅠ 내가 너무 길게 적은 것 같아서ㅠㅜㅜ스크럼블 교차로 얘기를 한문장만 얘기할까?

[익인10]

글쓴이에게
Additionally, I knew the crosswalk in front of the Shibuya station is famous for scramble crossing, but I was still astonished because there were a lot more people crossing than I thought.

음 합쳐도 줄여지지가 않나///

[익인11]

글쓴이에게
I've never seen like that을 빼도 되고

[글쓴이]

11에게
음음 그걸 빼야겠다ㅜㅜㅜ