나 영어 발표 작문했는데 틀린곳 좀 고쳐줄수 있니??ㅠㅠ 부탁할게ㅠㅠㅠㅠ

엄청 틀렸을텐데 ㅠㅠ 이게 내 한계라서ㅠㅠ 

 

대화 형식이야!! 

 

A: Did you hear that? 8days ago, turkey got big attacked, so far 128 people were killed by that attack. 

 

B: Yes. I heard that. That attack's behind is IS. In 2013, IS had attacked to Boston, whereby close to 300 people were killed or injured. 

 

A: Yes. What do you think of IS? 

 

B: IS victimized a lot of innocent people. I think it is should be dismantled as soon as possible. 

 

A: You're right. But IS has made on based on religious conflicts in muslim countries. Therefore it is difficult to solve the issues related to terrorim by dismantle the organization. 

 

B: I suppose. I hope that problem solved as soon as possible. 

 

부탁할게ㅠㅠ

[익인1]

일단 A1번은
that 뒤에 news 붙이고
Turkey got a big attack, So 128 of the people were killed.

[글쓴이]

고마워 고마워ㅠㅠ 진짜 도와줘서 고마워~~~ㅠㅠ 복받아!!!!

[익인2]

B1
I heard about that, too. That accident was from IS. Moreover, In 2013, IS attacked Boston where almost 300 of people were dead or injured.

[익인3]

A2
Yes를 You're right. 바꾸고
of 말고 about으로 바꿔

[익인4]

그리고 What~? 이 구문 앞에 So, 붙이고

[익인5]

B2
They should be dismantled because they kill a lot of innocent people.

[글쓴이]

어떡해ㅠㅠㅠㅠ 진짜 너무 고맙다ㅠㅠㅠㅠㅠㅠ 뭐라도 해주고 싶은데ㅠㅠㅠ 다 같은 익이니 맞아??ㅠㅠㅠㅠㅜ어엉엉ㅠㅠ

[익인6]

A3
You`re right이라는 표현이 겹치므로, I agree 혹은 I think so , too. 로 쓰고
But IS is based on religious conflicts and those are so complicated. Therefore, I think it`s difficult to dismantle them.

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B3
I suppose 라는 표현은 없어 ㅋㅋ
어쨌든 동의의 의미이므로 You can say that again 정도로 적으면 될 거 같고
아니면 아까 말한 I agree 정도.
그리고
I hope that All of the problems about IS solve well as soon as possible.

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[익인8]

I suppose 라는 표현 있지 않아? 책에서 봤던 것 같은데 아니라면 미안 ㅠㅠ