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주제 : Things that money cannot buy

 

We are living in the materialistic society.

Especially,it seems possible to do anything if you have got money.

But there is a thing that money cannot buy.

It is people's minds.

Somebody says that they can buy it.

However,can we really buy it?

That they bought would be greed for the wealth, not real people's minds.

Things we have to pay for someone who really thinks,comforts,and likes me is not some pieces of paper.

By giving our minds to them, we can also get their minds.

 

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