외국어 영작 좀 봐줘!!

 

 

 

 

 

문법 틀린것 좀 지적해줘~~ 이부분을 이렇게 하면 좀 더 좋을 것 같다고 해즈ㅓ도 좋아!!

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1. I'll introduce

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2. The title of my favorite book is

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4. First main character, Hae-yoeng's goal is

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5. actually 없어도 될 것 같아

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그리고 혜영 이름 여러번 계속 쓰지말고 she로 대명사화 하는게 좀 더 자연스러워

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6. Someday>>one day
Someday는 특정한 날을 가리키는게 아니라 막연하게 '그래 언젠가는 나도 성공할거야'이런 말 할 때 사용하는거얌

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7. Bak-ha is the person who is free-sprited and has a determined goal.

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14. So I decided not to be afraid of my challenge.

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15. who don't find their own dream.

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중간 사진은 보이지않아...

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엇 너무 고마워 ㅠㅠㅠ 중간사진 여기써!!! 보이니??

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8. 혜영 was shocked by his vision and personality.

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9. So 혜영 applied in school theater festival as a writer for her dream.

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10. Although her parents disagreed with her decision, she didn't change her mind.

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12. I'm thought >> I thought Wonderful>>great(뭔가 어감이 great가 더 좋은 것 같아서 이건 선택이얌)

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13. doesn't be afraid>> isn't afraid of

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사랑해 익이나 ♡♡♡ 넘넘 고마워!! 잘쟈